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Several Short Sentences

Source: Verlyn Klinkenborg, Several Short Sentences About Writing, opening lessons on sentence attention • Course status: one-chapter reader only

Core shift

Klinkenborg asks the writer to stop thinking of prose as a flow that must be sustained and start thinking of it as sentences that must each earn their place. A paragraph is not a fog bank. It is a sequence of decisions.

The lesson is especially useful for writers who hide uncertainty inside long sentences. Shorter sentences expose thought. They make weak links visible.

Sentence attention

The unit of work is the sentence.

HabitWhat it fixesPractice question
Write one sentence at a timeAutomatic ramblingWhat does this sentence do?
Trust short sentencesFake sophisticationIs the thought clearer when shorter?
Vary by purposeMonotonyWhere does the reader need speed or pause?
Read aloudHidden awkwardnessWhere does the breath fail?
Stop when doneOver-explanationWhat can the reader infer?

Short does not mean childish. It means accountable.

Revision map

The writer moves from flow to sequence.

The page improves when every sentence has a job.

The first habit

After drafting, put each sentence on its own line.

Sentence:
Job:
Keep / cut / split / move:
Next sentence needed:

This makes structure visible. You can see repetition, jumps, weak transitions, and sentences that exist only because you were warming up.

Practice drill

Take a paragraph and split it into separate lines. For each sentence, write one label:

LabelMeaning
ClaimSays what is true
EvidenceShows why
TurnChanges direction
ExampleMakes it concrete
WasteRepeats or decorates

Delete or rewrite every sentence labeled waste.

Checklist

  • [ ] Can you revise at the sentence level instead of only the paragraph level?
  • [ ] Can you make a sentence shorter without making it flat?
  • [ ] Can you name the job of each sentence?
  • [ ] Can you vary rhythm deliberately?
  • [ ] Can you stop before explaining what the reader already understands?